Elix3r N00b
Posts : 2 Join date : 2009-04-30 Age : 38 Location : H E L L
| Subject: Beyond Rubescent Wed May 06, 2009 7:10 am | |
| Sing in an enchanting tone that breaks my dark heart And know that each time I hear your angelic voice a Keen and radiant pain passes through the abyss that is my soul Urge the Life back into this long decrepit body and Recall lucid memories from once passion might have come. Allow these cordial hands to embrace your delicate, ivory skin Now and Forever, for eternity could not keep my Body from yours. Gravity could not hold me down long Enough, Time could not tick by without my agonizingly, Apprehensive mind grasping for your image. The vivid call Unto my being for yours stirs profoundly within me and a Tempest of emotion rumbles the walls within my inner most core. You shall always be my Sanctity, my Seraphim, my Sakura. | |
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MandaNoel07 The Saucy Manager
Posts : 878 Join date : 2009-04-30 Age : 35 Location : The backroad sticks of Appalachia
| Subject: Re: Beyond Rubescent Wed May 06, 2009 8:25 am | |
| Tha is very pretty. Very good descriptions. The reader can see the scene very well, and the emotions are played excelently.
*goes into English teacher mode*
You deserve an A for this!! :3
Seriously, I really like it.
-Manda | |
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