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 Beyond Rubescent

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Elix3r
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PostSubject: Beyond Rubescent   Wed May 06, 2009 7:10 am

Sing in an enchanting tone that breaks my dark heart
And know that each time I hear your angelic voice a
Keen and radiant pain passes through the abyss that is my soul
Urge the Life back into this long decrepit body and
Recall lucid memories from once passion might have come.
Allow these cordial hands to embrace your delicate, ivory skin
Now and Forever, for eternity could not keep my
Body from yours. Gravity could not hold me down long
Enough, Time could not tick by without my agonizingly,
Apprehensive mind grasping for your image. The vivid call
Unto my being for yours stirs profoundly within me and a
Tempest of emotion rumbles the walls within my inner most core.
You shall always be my Sanctity, my Seraphim, my Sakura.
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PostSubject: Re: Beyond Rubescent   Wed May 06, 2009 8:25 am

Tha is very pretty. Very good descriptions. The reader can see the scene very well, and the emotions are played excelently.

*goes into English teacher mode*


You deserve an A for this!! :3

Seriously, I really like it.

-Manda
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